Rough Draft Analysis

Our Rough Cut was not long enough as we still had roughly 40 seconds to go. Therefore we where going to have to come up with some more footage that will fill in the gap and allow us to further connote the female’s dominance. The title sequence that we had put in for the opening was well positioned however we had picked a inappropriate font to be used with our specific sub genre, therefore we choice Serif Sans as it is a much more simplistic font, that will go with the conventions of a Film Noir better, this will also help the shots flow. We found that making our shots flow was harder than we expected, this was mainly down to our film not being properly edited but because of this there was no rhythm making our piece seem jumpy, we tried to correct this briefly by making the shot length nearly the same where possible. This is something that we are definitely going to have to amend for our final cut. We also found that using transitions could be a possibility for our final piece, as this would hopefully make some shots flow easier. The diegetic sounds that where on the piece needed to be re done, as we are unable to hear the conversation-taking place out side. We also needed to change around the dialogue at the pool table as the accents used did not suit the aim of creating a Film Noir opening. Non – diegetic music was not added and this is something that we need to think about for our final piece, as it is essential to build tension in a scene. Lighting was also a problem in our first attempt, as all of our indoor shots where way to dark; we need to over come this by reshooting or changing the contrast on premier. Lastly I felt that there was not enough bold shots like Close Ups and P.O.V.’s used to capture the female’s dominance and help connote her significance over the males.